Good News, Bad News

Good News/Bad News

Good News/Bad News

And then there was the man–look!–
who fell out of an aero plane.  That was the bad news.
But, phew! he fell onto a haystack–
the good news:  that apparently his back
was not broken
through the intervention of
dried grass.
But hey! there was
a needle in that stack–bad news.  Except, wait–
he turned out to have a camel
in his pocket, which fit exactly through the eye
of that needle–good news–
for that took him straight to, do-not-pass-go to,
the kingdom of heaven, not
so much because he was a rich man
but because the haystack hadn’t worked that well after all–
not against a fall
from the sky.

This is the reworking of an old rather silly poem that is actually in my book Going on Somewhere.  I am posting it for Mary’s post “on the other hand” on dVerse Poets Pub.   Check out dVerse.  Check out my books!  
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28 Comments on “Good News, Bad News”

  1. brian miller Says:

    hahaha…nice…oy…i like the biblical references and the way you played on the camel through the eye of a needle…some days you cant win for losing…or is that the other way around?

    i am glad you are feeling better….

  2. Mary Says:

    Ha, even a haystack (including an eye of a needle as well) would not cushion such a fall!

  3. wolfsrosebud Says:

    I felt as if I was on a teeter totter… it was fun

  4. Rowan Taw Says:

    I loved the camel and the needle ☺️

  5. Well, THIS is a cool and humorous response to the prompt. Loved it, kiddo.

  6. Lightness, levity, a welcome dish for the Pub table; and why not have some fun with the prompt, I say; you certainly did.

  7. heh-heh – what pace and vitality! A poem that has a breathlessness about it or rather makes the reader feel breathless reading it – a delight 🙂

  8. Rallentanda Says:

    Ha…liked the humour in this. It probably was a double bad news item for that guy because the camel in his pocket was a miniscule key ring holder and did not pass the scripture quality control unit…+ double infringement points for trying to fool the angels:)Enjoyed this one!

  9. grapeling Says:

    Remember Roseanne Rosanna Danna, the Gilda Radner character from SNL? That’s the channel playing for me with your fun pen, K ~

  10. This was fun.. Finding the needle in the haystack is not always good – the camel was a great further twist in this little tale

  11. Mohana Says:

    haha!! this is cool 🙂

  12. C.C. Says:

    Very fun…I like the back and forth between good news and bad news.

  13. Brendan Says:

    A perfect reply to the challenge! Whatever you started with, this packs all of the punch in simple spare compressed language. Sigh.

  14. claudia Says:

    haha…now that is good luck and bad luck and good luck and bad luck… cool on the camel and needle eye reference… fun write and food for thought as well…

  15. alan1704 Says:

    A haystack is not very good to a rich man, perhaps he could have fallen on his wealth, Interesting and amusing in an modern parable.

  16. Steve King Says:

    You’ve brought the parable up to date: in our times, the endgame is not almost never in out control. A smart rendering, mixing the old with the new.
    Steve K.

  17. Steve King Says:

    Of course the “not” is a result of a hasty posting finger.
    Steve K.

  18. Laurie Kolp Says:

    This reminds me of a favorite story from childhood… wish I could remember the name of it.

  19. Susan Says:

    Beautiful! As a real paradise, not without death.

  20. lynndiane Says:

    Entertaining, enjoyable…we all “fell” for this one 🙂

  21. sreeja Says:


  22. Truedessa Says:

    Hard to fall from the poem to read

  23. Great, great, great! 🙂 Loved all the biblical references. They all fitted so perfectly around your zany, wacky lines. Loved it. Many thanks.

    Greetings from London.

  24. hedgewitch Says:

    This is both fun and mentally nutritious, k. I enjoyed laughing and chewing it over very much–especially the jumpy style, which works perfectly.

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