Friday Flash Fiction 55 – “Both Desperate”
Both Desperate
Hit, it still had flight
in its front legs. The man dragged
it by its antlers off the road, crouched
on its neck with a knife. It bled
in dark gulps, still tried to rear, roared.
He laid the hand not pressing it down
upon its shoulder, as if to calm,
as if touch could.
This is my 55 word story (not including title!) for the G-Man. (Thanks, Mr. Knowitall, for the incentive to compress this scene.)
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October 28, 2011 at 7:10 am
i am glad the mad was merciful other wise it would have been a long painful death…
just an fyi your link over at g-mans would not bring me here…
October 28, 2011 at 7:20 am
Thanks. I was having some trouble with that, will fix.
October 28, 2011 at 7:32 am
Thanks–just took a lesson in coding!
October 28, 2011 at 8:27 am
Your link is working great now…Thanks.
Your story is so very common around these parts nowadays that it could happen to anybody.
Loved your 55
Great perspective.
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End
October 28, 2011 at 11:49 am
This is so sad!
October 28, 2011 at 12:14 pm
I was touched by the hand on the shoulder, almost as if it were an apology. Love the artwork too.
October 28, 2011 at 12:45 pm
Thanks, it seemed like that to me too, and also kind of strange, as, of course, a wild animal would find a human touch difficult.
October 28, 2011 at 12:33 pm
Impressive use of 55 words.
October 28, 2011 at 12:45 pm
Thanks.
October 28, 2011 at 4:01 pm
…So heartbreaking, and yet, there’s this sense of apology. Great use of 55 words, I’d say! I’ve never been one for brevity. I’m not sure I could pull something like this off.
October 29, 2011 at 8:23 am
A bit sad, but the act of the hunter seems respectful.