Headbanging

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Headbanging

Bang bang bang
beat the conundrums,
timpani in my head,
tom-tom-tom and a dumdiddy dum,
with a side cowbell of dread.

Should I should I should I-ting–
Oh why oh why why why why why–bing!
Hiss siss siss
sighs the swirled snare,
boom boom bah
pounds the bass,
stretched skins trapping all care
in the rhythms of life’s chase.

Rum sounds a quest for the just and fair;
pum rumbles queries about my hair–
(what miracle might curve its flat to waves?)
bum swerves to whether Jesus saves.

Jig jig jig
jags each puzzle,
seesawing with the brums
of those fee-fie-foe diddy
fie-foe-fum fiddy
mind-numbing conun-drums.

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Here’s a little draft ditty for Brian Miller’s prompt on puzzles on http://dVersepoets.com (dVerse Poets Pub.) I call it a draft because I haven’t really fixed the verse form.

Since posting, I’ve added a recording of the poem, since I have a particular rhythm in mind.  If you’d like to hear it, click below.

Thanks!

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27 Comments on “Headbanging”

  1. grapeling Says:

    k – love the crash and tumble of this piece ~ M

  2. claudia Says:

    hahah…that was a fun verse k. – fun sounds and wordplays..love the cowbells…and i would love to hear you read it…smiles…

    • ManicDdaily Says:

      Yes – maybe I’ll try to post a reading. I am very behind today in terms of my job work – it is Sunday, but I have an overload of pending stuff that is making me feel very anxious. k.

  3. brian miller Says:

    ha. ok, the sounds in this are amazing…though imagining all that in my head makes me want to bang my head a bit…against a wall to make it stop for just a bit…smiles…this would def be a fun one to hear…smiles.

    • brian miller Says:

      ha. i enjoyed the reading…its fun for sure…the only weird cadence in it was after brums, from a sounds stand point you could probably make either a small adjustment there to smooth it…or find a place of breathing a bit earlier…

      • ManicDdaily Says:

        Thanks Brian for taking the time to listen. I should finally start on job work, but will try to check out. k.

      • claudia Says:

        cool reading k. i agree with what bri says – that was a little bit a stumbling stone… when i had singing lessons, my teacher used to paint marks into the piece where i was allowed to breathe (it weren’t many…just saying..ha…smiles) but that may help as well

  4. LaTonya Says:

    headbanging is rough and like M, like the tumbling, bumbling feel here.

  5. Mama Zen Says:

    I adore this! Really, this is brilliant.

    • ManicDdaily Says:

      Thanks so much, MZ. I just recorded it as I do think it’s probably fun to hear and I have a particular intonation in mind, so might as well put it out there. k.

  6. hedgewitch Says:

    This really fits my current semi-delirious mode well, k. Love the rum and Jesus, and the scattershot timpani of the progression.

  7. cloudfactor5 Says:

    Really enjoyed listening to the recording to get a feel of the rhythm that was splashing about ! This was my favorite stanza:
    “Rum sounds a quest for the just and fair;
    pum rumbles queries about my hair–
    (what miracle might curve its flat to waves?) indeed !!!!!!!
    bum swerves to whether Jesus saves.” Thanks for sharing !!


  8. Enjoyed the read K ~ The sounds just accentuate the head banging, thank goodness I am all calm ~


  9. Great piece… but I wouldn’t like to have that kind of drum inside your head. Loved the rhythm.

  10. Rowan Taw Says:

    I think I had the rhythm as I read, but I really appreciated listening to your reading.

  11. Beth Winter Says:

    Very clever! I loved hearing the recording as well, it gave each sound life. Wonderful cow bells 🙂


  12. This poem has a very unique an fun rhythm. Your reading really adds to the experience.


  13. heh-heh, heh-heh ‘beat the conundrums’ – love it! Wonderful rhythm here, I so enjoyed the audio and, of course, the drawing 🙂

  14. janehewey Says:

    fantastic fun here with this sound puzzle poem. I enjoyed your read. And esp. liked the rum pum bum stanza, thought the entire piece has audible flair.

  15. Susan Says:

    O! I read it to me first before I saw that you would. I enjoyed your conun drums so much. I have one too, of course, but I didn’t know it until I read your poem. I’m filing it under “Poems I cannot live without”! Thank you.


  16. What fun! I love the sound and rhythm of this.


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