Headbanging
Headbanging
Bang bang bang
beat the conundrums,
timpani in my head,
tom-tom-tom and a dumdiddy dum,
with a side cowbell of dread.
Should I should I should I-ting–
Oh why oh why why why why why–bing!
Hiss siss siss
sighs the swirled snare,
boom boom bah
pounds the bass,
stretched skins trapping all care
in the rhythms of life’s chase.
Rum sounds a quest for the just and fair;
pum rumbles queries about my hair–
(what miracle might curve its flat to waves?)
bum swerves to whether Jesus saves.
Jig jig jig
jags each puzzle,
seesawing with the brums
of those fee-fie-foe diddy
fie-foe-fum fiddy
mind-numbing conun-drums.
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Here’s a little draft ditty for Brian Miller’s prompt on puzzles on http://dVersepoets.com (dVerse Poets Pub.) I call it a draft because I haven’t really fixed the verse form.
Since posting, I’ve added a recording of the poem, since I have a particular rhythm in mind. If you’d like to hear it, click below.
Thanks!
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July 7, 2013 at 11:41 am
k – love the crash and tumble of this piece ~ M
July 7, 2013 at 11:55 am
hahah…that was a fun verse k. – fun sounds and wordplays..love the cowbells…and i would love to hear you read it…smiles…
July 7, 2013 at 11:58 am
Yes – maybe I’ll try to post a reading. I am very behind today in terms of my job work – it is Sunday, but I have an overload of pending stuff that is making me feel very anxious. k.
July 7, 2013 at 12:02 pm
ha. ok, the sounds in this are amazing…though imagining all that in my head makes me want to bang my head a bit…against a wall to make it stop for just a bit…smiles…this would def be a fun one to hear…smiles.
July 7, 2013 at 12:27 pm
ha. i enjoyed the reading…its fun for sure…the only weird cadence in it was after brums, from a sounds stand point you could probably make either a small adjustment there to smooth it…or find a place of breathing a bit earlier…
July 7, 2013 at 1:34 pm
Thanks Brian for taking the time to listen. I should finally start on job work, but will try to check out. k.
July 7, 2013 at 1:50 pm
cool reading k. i agree with what bri says – that was a little bit a stumbling stone… when i had singing lessons, my teacher used to paint marks into the piece where i was allowed to breathe (it weren’t many…just saying..ha…smiles) but that may help as well
July 7, 2013 at 12:06 pm
headbanging is rough and like M, like the tumbling, bumbling feel here.
July 8, 2013 at 7:03 am
Sorry LaTonya – your comments went to spam for some reason. I don’t check it that often, but glad I did. k .
July 7, 2013 at 12:12 pm
I adore this! Really, this is brilliant.
July 7, 2013 at 12:17 pm
Thanks so much, MZ. I just recorded it as I do think it’s probably fun to hear and I have a particular intonation in mind, so might as well put it out there. k.
July 7, 2013 at 12:29 pm
This really fits my current semi-delirious mode well, k. Love the rum and Jesus, and the scattershot timpani of the progression.
July 7, 2013 at 1:33 pm
Oh dear – so sorry to hear about the semi-delirium. Hope you will feel more yourself soon. k.
July 7, 2013 at 12:40 pm
Really enjoyed listening to the recording to get a feel of the rhythm that was splashing about ! This was my favorite stanza:
“Rum sounds a quest for the just and fair;
pum rumbles queries about my hair–
(what miracle might curve its flat to waves?) indeed !!!!!!!
bum swerves to whether Jesus saves.” Thanks for sharing !!
July 7, 2013 at 1:20 pm
Enjoyed the read K ~ The sounds just accentuate the head banging, thank goodness I am all calm ~
July 7, 2013 at 1:35 pm
Ha. Yes, you are lucky then. k.
July 7, 2013 at 1:45 pm
Great piece… but I wouldn’t like to have that kind of drum inside your head. Loved the rhythm.
July 7, 2013 at 1:45 pm
I think I had the rhythm as I read, but I really appreciated listening to your reading.
July 7, 2013 at 4:30 pm
Very clever! I loved hearing the recording as well, it gave each sound life. Wonderful cow bells 🙂
July 7, 2013 at 6:27 pm
This poem has a very unique an fun rhythm. Your reading really adds to the experience.
July 7, 2013 at 10:55 pm
heh-heh, heh-heh ‘beat the conundrums’ – love it! Wonderful rhythm here, I so enjoyed the audio and, of course, the drawing 🙂
July 8, 2013 at 6:59 am
Thanks, Polly. k.
July 8, 2013 at 2:23 am
fantastic fun here with this sound puzzle poem. I enjoyed your read. And esp. liked the rum pum bum stanza, thought the entire piece has audible flair.
July 8, 2013 at 11:42 am
O! I read it to me first before I saw that you would. I enjoyed your conun drums so much. I have one too, of course, but I didn’t know it until I read your poem. I’m filing it under “Poems I cannot live without”! Thank you.
July 8, 2013 at 12:16 pm
Ha! Thanks, Susan. k.
July 8, 2013 at 9:18 pm
Susan – thanks so much I also really enjoyed your Scrabble poem – a favorite gamee of mine and also liking the element of mixing it all up! Thans. k.
July 9, 2013 at 1:04 am
What fun! I love the sound and rhythm of this.