Sevenling – If Eve Had Been Offered a Pear
copyright Ellen Wilson
Sevenling- If Eve Had Been Offered a Pear
If Eve had been offered a pear
in his world view, there’d be no sin,
death, knowledge of good and evil;
only the press for ripeness, which would have called her
to wait long re-decisionist days for
the fruit to soften, moisten, slither between her lips–
As for me, a woman (and archetypal enough), I like crunch.
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The above is a “sevenling” posted for a form and picture prompt by Kerry O’Connor of With Real Toads. Read Kerry’s article for more information about the form which was inspired by Anna Ahkmotova, developed by Roddy Lumsdon. Mine is a rather silly example, but check out Real Toads for some lovely (and more serious) ones.
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ManicDDaily 
September 23, 2012 at 5:23 pm
I loved the dry humor in your sevenling–especially the slither and crunch (and not really so much humor as wit, a lost art indeed. ) And then I saw the tree shaking elephant and cracked up.
September 23, 2012 at 5:29 pm
Thanks. That’s an old picture, but I like it too. k.
September 23, 2012 at 6:15 pm
ha…more elephants, love it….i grew up with pears in the back yard so i like a pear…smiles…but i wont kick an apple to the curb…esp the sour ones…nice use of slither in the second to play off the creation and temptation story….
September 23, 2012 at 6:44 pm
Love the wit in your sevenling…….and adore the pachyderm pic…….
September 23, 2012 at 6:56 pm
Thanks, Sherry. k.
September 23, 2012 at 6:46 pm
I’m sure if it was pear and not apple, the masses would still make something up to play the blame game.
September 23, 2012 at 6:56 pm
I would not be surprised! k.
September 23, 2012 at 7:28 pm
I like the crunch and elephant picture K ~ I also like the first stanza about Eve ~
September 23, 2012 at 8:12 pm
Oh, clever! I like it!
September 23, 2012 at 9:54 pm
oh, waiting for the pear can be arduous. welcomed. i like the introduction of this thought into the old story. have never considered another fruit in the mix. I do love how your clever mind spins these scripts and curiosities, k.
September 23, 2012 at 10:42 pm
Ha! The best last line yet.
September 24, 2012 at 12:29 am
If Eve had been offered a pear… a great opening for a riddle…
September 24, 2012 at 2:04 am
LOL! That was delightful!
September 24, 2012 at 6:35 am
Karin, this made me smile laugh out loud. I have some of these fruits about which I was ‘decisionless’ in my refrigerator that I’m about to throw out. LOL.
September 24, 2012 at 6:50 am
Thanks, Mary. k.
September 24, 2012 at 6:51 am
PS – hard to get ripeness exactly right! k.
September 24, 2012 at 8:08 am
This is just excellent! Such a strong contrast between stanzas, and the final line is just so clever. There is something about women which remains unchanging – that preference for the crunch.
September 24, 2012 at 8:36 am
Thanks so much, Kerry. I enjoyed a new form so thanks for letting us know about it. k.
September 24, 2012 at 1:52 pm
Hahaha – love your wit! This is great, and the elephant is the icing on the cake!
September 24, 2012 at 3:12 pm
I really like this – partly because I rather love pears. They can be either crunchy or soft and have an interesting shape. 🙂
September 24, 2012 at 3:14 pm
Yes, I like them too, in all manners. It’s a bit of a joke at my husband’s expense who only will really eat them if carefully ripened. k.
September 25, 2012 at 11:16 am
Love the ‘crunch’ and bite of your sevenling …..
September 25, 2012 at 1:18 pm
I cracked up!!! Give me pears and apples, both softness and crunch! But above all, let the tasting not be sin nor ever waiting for the OTHER to decide!
September 27, 2012 at 5:33 am
Oh, very neat: a fascinating theological speculation that culminates with your dedication to original sin! I like this very much.