Sevenling – If Eve Had Been Offered a Pear

copyright Ellen Wilson

Sevenling- If Eve Had Been Offered a Pear

If Eve had been offered a pear
in his world view, there’d be no sin,
death, knowledge of good and evil;

only the press for ripeness, which would have called her
to wait long re-decisionist days for
the fruit to soften, moisten, slither between her lips–

As for me, a woman (and archetypal enough), I like crunch.

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The above is a “sevenling” posted for a form and picture prompt by Kerry O’Connor of With Real Toads. Read Kerry’s article for more information about the form which was inspired by Anna Ahkmotova, developed by Roddy Lumsdon. Mine is a rather silly example, but check out Real Toads for some lovely (and more serious) ones.

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24 Comments on “Sevenling – If Eve Had Been Offered a Pear”

  1. hedgewitch Says:

    I loved the dry humor in your sevenling–especially the slither and crunch (and not really so much humor as wit, a lost art indeed. ) And then I saw the tree shaking elephant and cracked up.

  2. brian miller Says:

    ha…more elephants, love it….i grew up with pears in the back yard so i like a pear…smiles…but i wont kick an apple to the curb…esp the sour ones…nice use of slither in the second to play off the creation and temptation story….


  3. Love the wit in your sevenling…….and adore the pachyderm pic…….

  4. Pat Hatt Says:

    I’m sure if it was pear and not apple, the masses would still make something up to play the blame game.

  5. Grace Says:

    I like the crunch and elephant picture K ~ I also like the first stanza about Eve ~

  6. Mama Zen Says:

    Oh, clever! I like it!

  7. janehewey Says:

    oh, waiting for the pear can be arduous. welcomed. i like the introduction of this thought into the old story. have never considered another fruit in the mix. I do love how your clever mind spins these scripts and curiosities, k.

  8. Margaret Says:

    Ha! The best last line yet.

  9. amidemanila Says:

    If Eve had been offered a pear… a great opening for a riddle…


  10. LOL! That was delightful!

  11. Mary Says:

    Karin, this made me smile laugh out loud. I have some of these fruits about which I was ‘decisionless’ in my refrigerator that I’m about to throw out. LOL.


  12. This is just excellent! Such a strong contrast between stanzas, and the final line is just so clever. There is something about women which remains unchanging – that preference for the crunch.

  13. Other Mary Says:

    Hahaha – love your wit! This is great, and the elephant is the icing on the cake!


  14. I really like this – partly because I rather love pears. They can be either crunchy or soft and have an interesting shape. 🙂

  15. Helen Says:

    Love the ‘crunch’ and bite of your sevenling …..

  16. Susan Says:

    I cracked up!!! Give me pears and apples, both softness and crunch! But above all, let the tasting not be sin nor ever waiting for the OTHER to decide!

  17. Dick Jones Says:

    Oh, very neat: a fascinating theological speculation that culminates with your dedication to original sin! I like this very much.


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