At Night
At Night
So, I breathe your chest
the way the Moon breathes
the Sun’s skin, inhaling
one half of the month, exhaling
the rest.
So, I rest upon your breath
the way the Earth rests
in the path of the Moon,
nearly centered.
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Here’s another poem that came from the springboard of the prompt of Grace (Everyday Amazing) on With Real Toads on David Huerta, a Mexican poet. I am probably linking to With Real Toads Tuesday open forum. All rights reserved (as always) in drawing and poem. (Yes, I know it’s not much of an elephant!)
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January 13, 2015 at 3:36 am
I love this, the inhaling and exhaling as that waxing and waning.. the rhythm of the moon has that gentle beat with itself.. Glorious..
January 13, 2015 at 4:30 am
I read this early this morning on my tablet and thought it just perfect and beautiful.
January 13, 2015 at 8:10 am
Beautiful offering K ~ The inhaling and exhaling process sounds calming & reassuring ~ Have a lovely week ~
January 13, 2015 at 12:25 pm
I love this, Karin … awake, asleep .. the Atlantic tides have lulled me into a serenity I had misplaced, but not forgotten.
January 13, 2015 at 12:32 pm
Hey Helen! I hope you are enjoying all the changes in your life! (But still singing!) Thanks much for the kind comment. K.
On Tue, Jan 13, 2015 at 12:25 PM, ManicDDaily wrote:
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January 13, 2015 at 12:45 pm
Your poem reads lily chant… from the heart and with Nature… musical and soft.
January 13, 2015 at 12:50 pm
Goodness. I just LOVE this! All of it. 🙂
January 13, 2015 at 1:36 pm
oh nice… such a sweet and deep intimacy in those images…
January 13, 2015 at 1:39 pm
I would be that child hopping up and down, pointing my fingers to the sky, and yelling “look! look! there is an elephant in the sky!” This is beautifully written.
January 13, 2015 at 3:27 pm
Whoa! this is beautiful – the moon inhaling and exhaling, a half-month at a time, and, especially, the closing stanza. Just gorgeous.
January 13, 2015 at 4:35 pm
Gorgeous.
January 13, 2015 at 6:25 pm
I love the love affair of noon and sun and the grounding of earth, the child?
January 13, 2015 at 7:02 pm
Heavy sigh…that was beautiful and peaceful. “so I rest upon your breath” super lovely.
January 13, 2015 at 9:50 pm
very cool…i love what you did in that opening gambit…relating it tot he sun moon relationship…the inhaling half exhaling…that was really cool k
January 14, 2015 at 12:32 am
Nice twisting and rotating thoughts, k. Right away I was thinking of my class in ‘Orbital Mechanics’ that I took while I was an engineer at NASA Houston. But your elephant kept distracting me and bringing me back to ‘center’. It is a nice drawing, perhaps a bit sensuous in my skewed thinking.
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Oh yes, we will have lemonade. Right now I am reading a book with the title, “When Life Gives You Lemons Make Lemonade” written by an Aussie blogger friend (sold by Amazon). I will finish it on an upcoming cruise.
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January 14, 2015 at 8:48 am
Just a beautiful, luminous love poem, k, that indeed picks up that loss of self in love, that translation, if you will, that the Spanish-language poets manage so perfectly–it also has the sparse feel of Oriental poetry to it, where words become another sort of inkbrush stroke on the page, elegant and twice as expressive in minimalism.
January 14, 2015 at 9:40 am
Thanks! Minimalism is certainly not my norm! But I was glad to get to it here. This one came sort of in the middle of the night–at least the first stanza, which I kept repeating to myself in half sleep for fear of forgetting (then just scribbled down in the dark.) I must thank Grace again as I found reading the Huerta poems really interesting and inspiring. And thank you for putting up with all my kvetching re the other one! k.
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January 14, 2015 at 3:10 pm
I love those that come out of one’s sleep like that–though sometimes they’re just nonsense, others they are the very best places to start a clear, condensed bit of writing, or any other good kind. I am missing that atm, but O well–not something you can *make* happen. And no apologies ever needed for kvetching. ;_)
January 14, 2015 at 3:12 pm
Thanks. Good luck! k.
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January 14, 2015 at 3:40 pm
nice poem to speak of love in a difference way and great job at being concise
January 15, 2015 at 1:00 am
This is so beautiful. One of the best moon poems I have ever read.
January 15, 2015 at 7:51 am
Thanks, Susie, for your exceedingly kind words. k.
January 15, 2015 at 4:53 am
What a wonderful noctal embrace. The moon shines in greater then lesser measure because of changing position to an Earth that is itself reflecting a third body, the sun. Doesn’t that happen in love and war. “Nearly centered” is a perfect button or last kiss for the poem, leaving things open for always trying yet again.
January 15, 2015 at 7:51 am
Thanks, Brendan. k.
January 15, 2015 at 6:34 am
awww, perfect. love that last line. love that your stanzas start with “so.” just love it.
January 15, 2015 at 7:50 am
Thank you, Marian. The “so” was how the poem came to me, so I was reluctant to take it out, but I wasn’t sure that it worked–so your comment is much appreciated! Hope all is well. k.
January 15, 2015 at 11:07 am
Oh, that “nearly centered” at the end killed me. Such passion. Thanks.
Greetings from London.
January 15, 2015 at 11:13 am
Ha. Thank you, Cubano! k.
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January 15, 2015 at 3:00 pm
I love your image.” Inhaling one half of the month, exhaling the rest” is a lovely description of our moon.
January 18, 2015 at 4:36 pm
This poem is beautiful and so is the elephant you drew… Smiles!
February 4, 2015 at 3:11 am
gorgeous ~
February 4, 2015 at 4:11 pm
Hey M–I wrote you on your blog–but just wanted to also thank you here for your very kind visit and comments. Hope all is going as well as it possibly might! And am very hopeful that you get more time soon! K.