Fault Lines
Fault Lines
Mea culpa mea culpa mea maxima culpa–
mostly, I say it sans latinate hoopla.
I’m sorry, my fault, like the big San Andreas,
cracks me in two–the scales that do weigh us
find me as lacking, as far from perfection,
as star from Mariana’s entrenched mid-section–
it’s not generalized failing–that much I know–
but what wrong I’ve done, I will not say now.
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A poem of sorts for Mama Zen’s Words Count on With Real Toads--to write a confession in 65 words (or less.) Just made it, without title.
Process note–the Mariana’s Trench–deepest place in the ocean.
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ManicDDaily 
May 14, 2014 at 10:45 pm
Ha! I love this. I should be writing one of these – given the “feedback” I’ve been getting lately, hee hee.
May 14, 2014 at 10:48 pm
perfection is over rated
and i dont know when
we are too far gone.
May 15, 2014 at 3:10 am
love that final line ~
May 15, 2014 at 3:57 am
I love these confessions that the wrong has been great but we refuse to say exactly how. Poems have grown into obscenely thick Bibles this way. Thank god there’s a Mama Z with her cat-tailed whip of brevity.
May 15, 2014 at 7:00 am
I believe I once told you I had decided that if I were going to have one, my tombstone would read name, dates of birth and death and:”It was all my fault.” so you know I relate to this one–our own culpability somehow always looms more weightily than the factors that brought it on. I love the line about Mariana’s trenchant midsection.
May 15, 2014 at 7:07 am
Trenchant! Such a great word. Maybe it is our generation. Thanks. K.
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May 15, 2014 at 8:17 am
Trenchant – new word for me, Thanks.
“I’m sorry, my fault, like the big San Andreas,
cracks me in two–the scales that do weigh us
find me as lacking, as far from perfection,
as star from Mariana’s entrenched mid-section–” Marvelous!
May 15, 2014 at 8:22 am
Thanks, Debi. k.
May 15, 2014 at 9:07 am
I have to wonder if the failure is real, or imagined, judged by your own (probably too strict) standards… Love the flow of this… And the sort of comparison between the San Andreas fault and the Mariana trench… Inspired!
May 15, 2014 at 9:10 am
Excellent! I love the originality of this, despite the confession being quite universal.
May 15, 2014 at 10:03 am
This is so cool! The rhythm reads flawlessly.
May 15, 2014 at 1:18 pm
ha – never apologize for anything… that seems to be the motto of some people i know – and others tend to apologize even for the things that is certainly not their fault – i haven’t found the perfect middle path yet..
May 15, 2014 at 2:41 pm
Ah. Yes. But we’ve got to take a break from “sorry” or it can become an annoying addiction. On another note, my high school students used to say “My Bad.” I tried to teach them mea culpa instead, but it didn’t take.
May 15, 2014 at 4:50 pm
Very cool and creative way you did this! We all have faults…I think it’s best just to admit it quickly and apologize when when of ours shows up.
May 15, 2014 at 5:08 pm
Oh I know the feeling….I seem to take the blame for everything….
May 17, 2014 at 9:36 am
Bravo! I love how you did this~ Yes, I too attempt the middle path~