Moon-tied (Last Friday Flash 55 for the G-Man)
Moon-tied
Ice floes,
ice flows.
That is how
ice goes.
Sunrise,
sun rays,
that is how
sun makes days.
Moontide,
moontied–
in its pallor
lovers sighed.
Hearts please
heart’s pleas–
never wise
for hearts to tease.
Moontied,
sunfound,
lover lying
on dank ground.
Too young this love
to ever know
quite how long
ice will flow.
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My last 55 for the gallant Galen–Yes, some of those are two words jammed together! But the ever tolerant Mr. G will still, I hope, allow my weekend to kick-a…
On a more serious note, many thanks to Galen, the G-man, Mr. Know-it-all for his wonderfully clever and sweet hosting of Friday Flash 55. His 55 prompt is a real exercise in discipline and, when discipline fails, slyness. He will still be blogging to–the delight of one Manicddaily. Also, thanks to his new hosts, Shay and Mama Zen.
P.S. – the above if anyone is interested is a picture taken a night a couple of years ago of ice floes in the Hudson at the bottom of Manhattan.
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March 28, 2014 at 5:26 pm
Oh, this is great! Excellent word work. :o)
March 28, 2014 at 8:48 pm
Karin…
You need never ask if any artistic choice you use is OK
It’s OK!!!
Not only that…It’s PERFECT!
Just Like your sweet comments
Yes K, I’ll still be around, just not every Friday
Please support the new hostesses
And…Have a Kick Ass Week-End!!!
March 28, 2014 at 8:53 pm
Moontide… I’m already swooning.
March 28, 2014 at 9:05 pm
or that love will go…
hoping the ice floes are gone soon
and we are in for warmer weather
March 28, 2014 at 10:15 pm
Very cool photo – and I enjoyed the wordplay!
March 29, 2014 at 1:58 am
ha – i love the word play and the quick flow of the words… ha… i hope the ice will melt quickly like that..
March 29, 2014 at 7:00 am
I love the flow of the words and repetition.
“Lover lying on dank ground,” would have fit nicely into mine.
We have our own ice floes in the St. Clair River where Lake Huron rushes into the millstream. Hopefully all this ice will soon rush on out of here.
March 29, 2014 at 9:17 am
Great enjambment and portmanteau-ing here, k. The words just roll off the tongue and the images into the mind–for some reason the last lines made me picture Ophelia, though she was floating not lying on the ground. Also a wonderful allegory on a lot of levels of love, relationship and time. If this is an exercise in slyness, it has exceeded its goal.
March 29, 2014 at 10:55 am
Thanks –that’s such a good point. And “drown” rhymes (enough) with found–so maybe that would work better with the whole scheme of it. It felt a little Victorian, but it was fun to think about. Thanks again. Looking forward, with great trepidation, to April. Not sure how it will work, but maybe it will make me just say “no” to things that are too much. k.
March 29, 2014 at 12:19 pm
I’m amazed at how much you said in 55 words and how you have fitted it all in a neat form, wordplay, rhyme galore. This is so cool, k.
March 29, 2014 at 5:03 pm
Too young indeed….but I do hope that the ice flows for a long, long time. A great final 55 for Galen, Karin.
March 31, 2014 at 10:51 pm
Wonderful word play, K! Nicely done 🙂