Goldilocks With Just Two Bears
Goldilocks With Just Two Bears
She lived in zigs and zags,
ecstatic spurts and crying jags,
ejaculated joy at the start of study
of some new boy whose cheeks
were ruddy (though once his lessons
were fully mastered, his name tag morphed
to “frigging bastard.”)
Too cold, too hot, naught hit the spot
Or, if it did, soon turned to rot.
And though she longed for the middle way,
her balance still would always sway
towards the fasts, the slows,
the highs, the lows,
the extremes that she
could not forego.
The only middle that she found
was in between those two bears brown,
whose matted fur warmed both her sides,
whose porridge filled her up betides,
and taking in each hand a paw
(not deterred by sharp of claw),
she held on tight through day and night
through flight and height, through blight and bite,
keeping always in her sights
the coveted, but not, just-rights.
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Posting the above for dVerse Poets Pub Poetics prompt hosted by Mary Kling to revamp some legendary, storybook or mythological figure. Check out dVerse for wonderful poetry.
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March 30, 2013 at 4:58 pm
that frigging bastard…ha…that is a bit of an interesting love triangle there….smiles….i would say this one swayed a bit hot…ha…
March 30, 2013 at 4:58 pm
smiles…glad she found a bit of balance and warmth with the bears in all her ups and downs and extremes…she reminded me a little bit of myself as a teenager…. i had a dog that held me in balance a bit..smiles
March 30, 2013 at 4:59 pm
ha…just read bri’s comment…i didn’t even think along that way… think i was just lured in by the warmth…smiles
March 30, 2013 at 7:48 pm
I was aware of the implication, but wasn’t really thinking that way – but you know Brian! k.
March 30, 2013 at 5:37 pm
Some rather hot property happening here! It sizzles with innuendo behind innocent teenage confusions!
March 30, 2013 at 5:57 pm
It’s hard to bypass those extremes when you’re younger…always looking for an edge on which to balance… terrific stuff really well done… ah that Goldilocks where did she go! 🙂
March 30, 2013 at 6:26 pm
Oh, I really liked this version, Karin. It was fun to read aloud with the rhyming; and glad that she found a place for herself between the two bears. Sometimes ‘between’ is the place to be!
March 30, 2013 at 6:31 pm
Goodness, this is a gem K ~ We are always striving for balance, but in reality, we do go for extremes ~ Love the beat and rhyming words of the last verse ~
March 30, 2013 at 7:06 pm
Finding a balance is all well and good, but no good holding out for the perfect guy (bear) if we’re too picky!
March 30, 2013 at 7:12 pm
though once his lessons
were fully mastered, his name tag morphed
to “frigging bastard”
Ain’t that the truth? This is clever and hilarious, and I love it!
March 30, 2013 at 8:31 pm
Thanks so much, MZ. k.
March 30, 2013 at 7:13 pm
nice poetic say to tell this tale. 🙂
Cinderella Limerick
March 30, 2013 at 7:23 pm
this is fantastic fun, karin. I like your version with the two, it calls up a sort of gemini-goldilocks. one I can relate to. I’d like to say she is wiser in this version, I sense she is definitely older than the original Goldy. Fine work. Your rhythm is delightful.
March 30, 2013 at 7:48 pm
Yes, probably (wiser than original Goldy, that is.) Thanks, Jane. k.
March 30, 2013 at 7:51 pm
Laughing, k–though it’s all too sadly true. Still, one has to learn to laugh at one’s youthful, and sometimes not-so-youthful foibles, or one would get dismal. Holding on to those two bears–cubs, I’m choosing to think–sounds like a good plan to me. I love the picture too–though I was very confused for about thirty seconds trying to make the bears into elephants. ;_)
March 30, 2013 at 8:46 pm
Ha–well, I confuse it is a recycling and combination of two very different drawings – the iPad allows for a fair amount of cheating which is great when one is pressed for time and skill! k.
March 30, 2013 at 8:16 pm
Wow–this is like a steamy Dr. Seuss. Loved.
March 30, 2013 at 8:59 pm
I enjoyed the lilt and rhyme of this, and the tale it told……cool response to the prompt:)
March 30, 2013 at 9:00 pm
Thanks, Sherry – I love your baby wolf video! k.
March 30, 2013 at 10:31 pm
It is true that more often we tend to want what we cannot have instead of what is good for us. Nicely done
March 31, 2013 at 2:08 am
Oh this was great, always the middle guy missing. Very good
March 31, 2013 at 5:27 am
Hmmm, I read the comments but didn’t see anyone getting my impression:
Wrestling with manic-depressive swings of moods and ways of being.
I must say, I really enjoyed the rhyme and rhythm too!
March 31, 2013 at 7:22 am
Thanks, Sabio. I think people are very affected by initial comments in terms of how they see a piece. You are very independent-minded! k.
March 31, 2013 at 6:24 am
well done, tight and sharp, love the humor in this
March 31, 2013 at 8:28 am
Fabulous use of rhythm and rhyme, Karin. Now we know why there had to be three bears….
March 31, 2013 at 9:58 am
…to be honest been having difficulty understanding your poem Karin… it’s quite deep for me… i’d like to put my comment earlier but i’m afraid i don’t have the right words to express it… and i’m coming again to let you know i read yours & tried hard to dig it… maybe i should practice more & more in comprehensive reading… smiles… happy easter…
March 31, 2013 at 10:01 am
Don’t worry. It is very much based on the telling of a story here and I doubt whether they tell the story in the same way in the Phillippines. You have to know the story well to get it – and not just the story, but our way of telling it. k.
On Sun, Mar 31, 2013 at 10:58 AM, ManicDDaily
March 31, 2013 at 10:07 am
I enjoyed this emotional display “she lived in zigs and zags” you have to watch those bears..
March 31, 2013 at 11:18 am
Wonder what mama bear had to say about that …
March 31, 2013 at 12:39 pm
Ha. What a great story. Makes me wonder if she can really trust the bears, or rather can she trust her own judgment.
March 31, 2013 at 5:02 pm
I think we can all see ourself in this unsteadiness and back & forth, lack of decisiveness yet, its the seeking that help us reach a choice ~wonderful wit!
April 1, 2013 at 2:25 am
Very clever and well done!
April 1, 2013 at 5:49 am
An deeply engaging, witty, hilarious piece!! I think balance is so important — in every aspect of life.Lovely…
April 1, 2013 at 5:50 am
A deeply engaging, witty and hilarious piece!! I guess, balance is so important in every aspect of life–Lovely take…!
April 29, 2013 at 6:29 pm
Blonds do have more fun. Balance can wait until old age. More than clever word & rhyme scheme, as always in the ManicDaily style…