Cinquain on Nerves, Nerves on Cinquain (And Friday Flash 55)
This elephant looks a litlte nervous. (It’s because I am including this caption in my 55 word count!)
Cinquain On Nerves
Sinking
stomach rising
to chest, slinking to loins,
groin, purloined to fight or flight–flight
mainly.
Nerves On Cinquain
Cinquain!
Sing me some peace!
Pacify with puzzling
those wracked synapses that capsize
night heart.
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Today has been a day of very stretched nerves, leading me to write these paired cinquains for dVerse Poets Pub Forms For All Prompt on Cinquains. See the great article by A.B. Maude (a/k/a Tony). I also wrote them for the inimitable G-Man. Do not tell him that I had to include the caption of my elephant in order to come up with 55 words.
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Today has been a day of very stretched nerves, leading me to write these paired cinquains for dVerse Poets Pub Forms For All Prompt on Cinquains. See the great article by A.B. Maude (a/k/a Tony). I also wrote them for the inimitable G-Man. Do not tell him that I had to include the caption of my elephant in order to come up with 55 words.
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ManicDDaily 
March 14, 2013 at 9:31 pm
Cheating isn’t bad, especially when you have such fun word play!
March 14, 2013 at 9:33 pm
I can certainly relate, as I’ve been having one of those days too! I hope you get to relax soon, especially with the weekend approaching.
March 14, 2013 at 9:34 pm
Yes, me too! And same to you, Rowan. TGIF!!!!!
March 14, 2013 at 9:58 pm
Fight or Flight? You can stand your ground! 🙂
March 14, 2013 at 10:24 pm
Ha! My sense is that fighting is standing your ground. Sort of. And at the moment I am feeling very flight oriented. But I guess it really depends what’s at stake. Hope you are well, Margaret. k.
March 14, 2013 at 11:00 pm
Well, unless you are Dr. Who… then you RUN! (do you watch this show?)
March 15, 2013 at 12:37 pm
Ha – no, I have heard great things about it, but I have never seen it. (You know, I have a lot of problems with my eyes, so if I am going to wear them out, try to do it on the computer mainly.) K.
March 14, 2013 at 10:08 pm
haha…it took me a while to get mine going…i was about ready to just say forget it at one point…actually did throw away from first try…so i feel you…haha nice job using the caption as well…smiles…
March 14, 2013 at 10:24 pm
Love the nervous elephant, and it is not cheating if I like it, and I do 😉
March 14, 2013 at 10:27 pm
Ha. Thanks, Susan! k.
On Thu, Mar 14, 2013 at 11:24 PM, ManicDDaily
March 14, 2013 at 10:38 pm
Like I’m gonna say something to YOU about anything literary.
But what you did was certainly within the rules. Great job at satisfying both prompts as usual …:-)
Loved your dual purpose 55
Thanks Karin for your weekly Tour de Farce
You Rock Baby
Have a Kick Ass Week End
March 15, 2013 at 12:37 pm
Tour de Farce! Ha. (She chortles.) K.
March 14, 2013 at 11:29 pm
Wonderful couple of cinquains that captures anxiety perfectly. (and i love the elephants)
March 14, 2013 at 11:59 pm
so are you nervous because of the travels already… i always am…smiles.. good work on the cinquains and both felt
March 15, 2013 at 12:07 pm
I think I may be mainly nervous due to caffeine! I am nervous of my trip and finishing up for it. K.
March 15, 2013 at 12:39 am
Great cinquains. Fabulous elephants. Hope the nervous find some soothing …
March 15, 2013 at 2:17 am
… ah, you had me initially at your excellent produce of assonance & alliteration… it has this bouncing effect that is i think perfect for your nerve cinquains… loved it… smiles…
March 15, 2013 at 2:32 am
Great flow in both. And refreshing confessions.
March 15, 2013 at 3:09 am
A great pair.Liked the second one especially.
March 15, 2013 at 3:34 am
Cute elephant he looks worried but has a sunny heart ~ I like the poems too 🙂
March 15, 2013 at 4:20 am
love the first one particularly
March 15, 2013 at 5:24 am
Just the word play is worth the admission price, let alone the quality of the two poems. I have so much fun reading your poetry. manyt hanks.
Greetings from London.
March 15, 2013 at 6:01 am
Some days are like that. The second cinquain resonates. Sometimes just sitting and writing is GOOD for the nerves. Takes one’s mind off other things. Perfect flight!
March 15, 2013 at 7:43 am
Sorry you had that kind of day, but it did result in some wonderful words… love the joining of loins, groin, purloined.
March 15, 2013 at 7:50 am
so descriptive
March 15, 2013 at 8:35 am
Enjoyed the internal rhyme in both as well, especially
“wracked synapses that capsize”
March 15, 2013 at 12:06 pm
Thanks, Randy. k.
March 15, 2013 at 8:47 am
The cinquains are telling, but the manic elephant really shouts it!
March 15, 2013 at 12:05 pm
Ha, thanks. k.
March 15, 2013 at 9:07 am
Delicious wordplay – although perhaps delicious is the wrong word to use when there’s an unsettled stomach about 🙂 And you can definitely call me Tony, k – all my friends do 🙂
March 15, 2013 at 9:43 am
Feelings we have all suffered from at one point or another…so perfectly captured!
March 15, 2013 at 9:53 am
These are excellent examples of how the form compresses and refines–I especially like the second..and I certainly can relate to both. Great job with both forms, k.
March 15, 2013 at 12:05 pm
Thanks, Joy. k.
March 15, 2013 at 10:57 am
I love the wracked synapses!
March 15, 2013 at 12:04 pm
Thanks so much.
March 15, 2013 at 12:10 pm
A terrific pair of cinquains, and seething communication. The older I get, the more I realize that my nerves seem to be in a heightened state of alacrity 24/7; sudden sounds, daily stresses; all seem more paramount.
March 15, 2013 at 12:10 pm
Absolutely. k.
March 15, 2013 at 1:51 pm
I appreciate your plea for peace in the second. Great allit. and such in your first one. These are both strong pieces of poetry. I like reading them next to each other. “Cinquain” is a really beautiful word, I think. And “purloined” placed so nicely. wonderful reading.
March 15, 2013 at 2:52 pm
Thanks so much, Jane. k.
March 15, 2013 at 7:10 pm
ps –I also like the word cinquain – i was trying to get to that with the sinking – etc – but not very successfully. k.
March 15, 2013 at 11:53 pm
I’m never less than impressed or delighted by everything that has your signature ! Blessings k~ D
March 16, 2013 at 6:28 am
Thanks so much, Deb. You are very kind. k.