Cinquain on Nerves, Nerves on Cinquain (And Friday Flash 55)


This elephant looks a litlte nervous. (It’s because I am including this caption in my 55 word count!)

Cinquain On Nerves

stomach rising
to chest, slinking to loins,
groin, purloined to fight or flight–flight

Nerves On Cinquain

Sing me some peace!
Pacify with puzzling
those wracked synapses that capsize
night heart.

Today has been a day of very stretched nerves, leading me to write  these paired cinquains for dVerse Poets Pub Forms For All Prompt on Cinquains.  See the great article by A.B. Maude (a/k/a Tony).  I also wrote them for the inimitable G-Man.  Do not tell him that I had to include the caption of my elephant in order to come up with 55 words.  
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42 Comments on “Cinquain on Nerves, Nerves on Cinquain (And Friday Flash 55)”

  1. Teresa Says:

    Cheating isn’t bad, especially when you have such fun word play!

  2. Rowan Taw Says:

    I can certainly relate, as I’ve been having one of those days too! I hope you get to relax soon, especially with the weekend approaching.

  3. Margaret Says:

    Fight or Flight? You can stand your ground! 🙂

    • ManicDdaily Says:

      Ha! My sense is that fighting is standing your ground. Sort of. And at the moment I am feeling very flight oriented. But I guess it really depends what’s at stake. Hope you are well, Margaret. k.

      • margaretbednar Says:

        Well, unless you are Dr. Who… then you RUN! (do you watch this show?)

      • ManicDdaily Says:

        Ha – no, I have heard great things about it, but I have never seen it. (You know, I have a lot of problems with my eyes, so if I am going to wear them out, try to do it on the computer mainly.) K.

  4. brian miller Says:

    haha…it took me a while to get mine going…i was about ready to just say forget it at one point…actually did throw away from first try…so i feel you…haha nice job using the caption as well…smiles…

  5. Love the nervous elephant, and it is not cheating if I like it, and I do 😉

  6. G-Man Says:

    Like I’m gonna say something to YOU about anything literary.
    But what you did was certainly within the rules. Great job at satisfying both prompts as usual …:-)
    Loved your dual purpose 55
    Thanks Karin for your weekly Tour de Farce
    You Rock Baby
    Have a Kick Ass Week End

  7. heidi Says:

    Wonderful couple of cinquains that captures anxiety perfectly. (and i love the elephants)

  8. claudia Says:

    so are you nervous because of the travels already… i always am…smiles.. good work on the cinquains and both felt

  9. Jamie Dedes Says:

    Great cinquains. Fabulous elephants. Hope the nervous find some soothing …

  10. Kelvin S.M. Says:

    … ah, you had me initially at your excellent produce of assonance & alliteration… it has this bouncing effect that is i think perfect for your nerve cinquains… loved it… smiles…

  11. Sabio Lantz Says:

    Great flow in both. And refreshing confessions.

  12. A great pair.Liked the second one especially.

  13. Cute elephant he looks worried but has a sunny heart ~ I like the poems too 🙂

  14. love the first one particularly

  15. Just the word play is worth the admission price, let alone the quality of the two poems. I have so much fun reading your poetry. manyt hanks.

    Greetings from London.

  16. Mary Says:

    Some days are like that. The second cinquain resonates. Sometimes just sitting and writing is GOOD for the nerves. Takes one’s mind off other things. Perfect flight!

  17. Laurie Kolp Says:

    Sorry you had that kind of day, but it did result in some wonderful words… love the joining of loins, groin, purloined.

  18. cloudfactor5 Says:

    Enjoyed the internal rhyme in both as well, especially
    “wracked synapses that capsize”

  19. The cinquains are telling, but the manic elephant really shouts it!

  20. Tony Says:

    Delicious wordplay – although perhaps delicious is the wrong word to use when there’s an unsettled stomach about 🙂 And you can definitely call me Tony, k – all my friends do 🙂

  21. Talon Says:

    Feelings we have all suffered from at one point or another…so perfectly captured!

  22. hedgewitch Says:

    These are excellent examples of how the form compresses and refines–I especially like the second..and I certainly can relate to both. Great job with both forms, k.

  23. kkkkaty Says:

    I love the wracked synapses!

  24. A terrific pair of cinquains, and seething communication. The older I get, the more I realize that my nerves seem to be in a heightened state of alacrity 24/7; sudden sounds, daily stresses; all seem more paramount.

  25. janehewey Says:

    I appreciate your plea for peace in the second. Great allit. and such in your first one. These are both strong pieces of poetry. I like reading them next to each other. “Cinquain” is a really beautiful word, I think. And “purloined” placed so nicely. wonderful reading.

  26. I’m never less than impressed or delighted by everything that has your signature ! Blessings k~ D

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