“The Nap” (Villanelle With Non-fitting Elephants)


The Nap (Post Fight, Post Reconcilation) 

Side by side, we slid to a dry, still, place.
It was not a woeful drought of age or dust,
the softer dryness of a tear-trailed face.

We never used to find this quiet space.
Any closeness quickly clambered into lust.
But side by side, we slid to a dry, still, place

where hands touched in a sweat-free interlace,
fatigue overwhelming pheromone fuss
with the softer dryness of a tear-trailed face.

Some other time we’d find that moist embrace
where pleasure mounts to such synaptic bust
I find myself side-sliding to a place

as blank as emptied well, as capsized chase.
(My brain reacts so badly to heart’s trust,
the softer dryness of a tear-trailed face.)

But today, we two, exhausted by the pace
of time and life and words like ‘should’ and ‘must’,
side by side, slid to a dry, still, place,
the softer dryness of a tear-trailed face.


First off, want to say how gladdened and moved I am by Obama’s statements re gay marriage.  (Hurray! And Finally! But mainly just plain Hurray!)

Secondly, I am posting the above villanelle for Imaginary Garden With Real Toads.  (If you like villanelles, do check out that category on this blog.  I’ve done a lot – I’m not sure this is such a good one, but  it hasn’t been circulated very much.)   (And no, the elephants sitting up in bed do not really fit with either the poem or gay marriage!  I just liked the picture.) (And no, they are not Republican elephants.)

Finally, thanks as always for your patience and ongoing support.  It is much appreciated on this end.

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9 Comments on ““The Nap” (Villanelle With Non-fitting Elephants)”

  1. janehewey Says:

    I enjoyed this very much! the pattern and structure. being brand new on the scene, this is the first villanelle i’ve “consciously” read. thank you for the powerful introduction.

    • ManicDdaily Says:

      Thank *you,* Jane, for your kind words. I have a bunch of them if you are interested- I really like the form, I guess. Perhaps because once you get your repeating lines, you don’t have to come up with much else! K.

  2. This is an excellent example of villanelle, and I especially like the modern voice you have given the traditional poem.

  3. Marian Says:

    very nice! wow. the villanelle is my nemesis. i am highly impressed.

  4. Teresa Says:

    Wonderful villanelle!

  5. brian miller Says:

    nice…i have yet to try a villanelle..it is an enchanting form…i like the story you put into it as well…though i will say make sex is not bad at all…but also the just being together in that dry place is not bad either…smiles….and heck yeah on the obama announcement…

    • ManicDdaily Says:

      Yes, I agree that meke-up sex is not bad. This is an older poem, and I’m not sure that it actually arose from a fight! But I was looking for a reason for the tears–I’m kind of a teary person to begin with, I think. k.

  6. shanyns Says:

    Nicely done…

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