To the Moon, 4 a.m.

To the Moon, 4 a.m.

I thought I was the only one up,
but there you were, turning the kitchen windows
into blue stairwells.

My eyes climbed to the surprise
of your brightness, a not-quite-sphere of light that redeemed
this whole muddled night,
the unexpected that was exactly
as it should be,
for which I thank you,
(for which I thank you.)

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A poem for Kerry O’Connor’s moon micro poetry challenge on real toads.

Another version for those interested.
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To the Moon, 4 a.m.

I thought I was the only one up,
but there you were, turning the kitchen windows
into blue stairwells.

My eyes climbed to the surprise
of your brightness–a not-near-sphere of light that redeemed
this muddled night, its inconstancy
as reliable as the breath, or death, a circle not
wholly seen.

 

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13 Comments on “To the Moon, 4 a.m.”

  1. lemon j. Says:

    I love this piece. Your work never disappoints.

    This is my favorite section:

    “there you were, turning the kitchen windows
    into blue stairwells.

    My eyes climbed to the surprise
    of your brightness”

  2. Jim Says:

    It’s sort of mystic but wonderful when we are the only one up at four. We might expect all sorts of troubles but in general, life goes on.
    I truly was up this morning just after four, I peeked out the front window and there was a rabbit sitting on the front walk. It was there about the same time yesterday morning, both times just sitting.
    Should I “expect” it to be there again for the third time in the morning?
    ..


  3. Love both versions of this! Your first stanza is a knockout!

  4. Rosemary Nissen-Wade Says:

    The first one seemed to me so perfect that the second now seems like gilding the lily, a bit over-complicated. But if I had seen it first … who knows?


  5. Both versions have their unique appeal, but I really love the second version. The inconstancy and non-reliability, the moon lends to the night, makes the whole thing more real to me… and strangely alive.

  6. sanaarizvi Says:

    I love both versions!! You have flair for poignant and mesmerizing imagery, K ❤️

  7. Kerry O'Connor Says:

    It is these moments, so easily bypassed, which serve to teach us certain truths about existence.

  8. Marian Says:

    Ah, just beautiful, like moonglow at 4 am.

  9. M Says:

    hi K. this piece (both versions) have that ‘a-ha!’ quality – as though i had written it myself, as though we’ve both seen this 4 am (except your view is more eloquent than my early morning mumblings.)

    it’s good to see you write. and i think i understand perfectly well why you’ve been quiet. i hope – well, maybe I’ve given up hope – but i nonetheless hope things improve for you. ~

    • ManicDdaily Says:

      Dear Michael,

      Thanks so much for your kind comment and concern. The blogging has been impossible for me and I don’t know that I’ll go back very soon, but I really did enjoy it while I did it, especially for the interactions with people like you, and the opportunity to read your work. I am feeling better. Take care, k.

    • ManicDdaily Says:

      I am wondering if it is worth posting drawings as I am doing quite a few of those. I don’t know if people are interested though they are certainly quick to look at!


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