Bullet Points (From Mars)


Bullet Points (From Mars)

Bullet hole eyes
blanks espied.
Bullet rip mouth
lips unhoused.
Bullets gutting
stinks rutting.
Bullets split
limbs spilt.

Belly swells
bullet’s well.
Cratered head
the body’s own
red planet.

For my own prompt on With Real Toads to write of something real, with artifice, if possible influenced by Picasso.  In this case, very influenced by Picasso’s WWII sculptures seen at the ongoing MOMA show. 


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14 Comments on “Bullet Points (From Mars)”

  1. lynn__ Says:

    Disturbing…as thoughts/memories of war and whizzing bullets must be

  2. This is so well done… I feel the match of words with those bullets are like soldiers…

  3. hedgewitch Says:

    Sinister words for what almost seems a child’s pretend creature–yet they do follow that horrible violent trajectory that war enforces in the mind. Perhaps war *is* a child’s pretend creature, the atavistic and vengeful, paranoid child in a tantrum rage, where anger rules every cell. Anyway, this piece makes the mind go several ways–chilling, to say the least.

  4. It’s almost like your words are marching in formation! Very good!

  5. Kerry O'Connor Says:

    This makes a strong statement.

  6. Jim Says:

    Artifice here, k? It sounds like a typical Saturday Houston (Texas) night. Probably will be more than a few of these now that the cowboys can ‘bring there guns to town’ here now.

  7. Thanks for sharing these along with your photos from the Picasso show (would love to have seen that). Your poem accompanies these images well. Great prompt too–wish I could have found time to write to it.

    • ManicDdaily Says:

      Thanks so much, Mark. The show is up till Feb 7 (not saying you could get to NY, but just in case.) The NY Times has a couple of good reviews with a far wider selection of pics–beautiful cardboard and other pieces, more cubist– guitars etc. (You know, I am not really against Florida at all–just had a hard time at Marriott and conference.) k.

  8. gillena Says:

    this piece syncs well with your chosen image; its a very disturbing write

    much love…

  9. Helen Dehner Says:

    Intense, sobering, a great write.

  10. Rommy Says:

    I like the bluntness of this. The rhythm really adds to the piece.

  11. I like the tone, and the descriptions that say so much while keeping even more. Damage has been done to this face, and although this is known, the realness of the hurt can’t be completely grasped…

  12. The image is childlike – but disturbing. So are the words.

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