Before Writing It Down

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Before Writing It Down

The view I get
might be described
by the word glimmer
if the word glimmer
were the word flicker
and if the view were a glance
and glance was dance and a dance
was a poem.

There it is–glimmering, flickering, viewed
at a glance
as it dances past
the corner of
my eye,
and though my pen
certainly extends my reach
by a good six inches,
it is never enough to truly pen
that view,
to hem it in
that corner,
so I might actually be able
to exhibit it–
if exhibit meant press
to the page
like a flower or leaf
so that even years later
it still brings with it
as pages split
either spring
or fall.

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Another drafty one for With Real Toads, for Ella’s prompt on the Kumulipo, a Hawaiian prayer chant, asking for poems about one’s creative process.  The picture is mine taken at a beach outside Seattle, Washington.

I think I inadvertently posted the picture before I meant to post and then I deleted that premature post!  Sorry for any confusion.  Also, I’m not sure if the picture is posting properly–so if you can’t see the whole thing (it is a very sweet pic) just click on it.

PS – I am calling everything a draft lately because I feel like I am writing much more quickly than normal (when I finally do get down to writing), which always leaves me with a feeling of some insecurity about what I am posting.  This one I’ve edited since first posting.

 

 

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27 Comments on “Before Writing It Down”

  1. Ella Says:

    I love the scatter thoughts like we can hear the thoughts in your head. I love these lines:

    “if exhibit meant press
    to the page
    like a flower or leaf
    so that even years later
    it still brought with it
    as the pages split
    either spring
    or fall.”

    Gorgeous! I love your photo. I love to blow bubbles-so magical~

    • ManicDdaily Says:

      THanks, Ella. I actually woke up in the middle of the night to change those lines–realizing I could put in “bring” and there’d be a little rhyme–ha! Thanks.


  2. The wordplay and rhymes in this laps my feet just like the gently waves in your picture does.. wonderful piece…

    “if the view were a glance
    and glance was dance and a dance
    was a poem”

    Some poems are born just like that…

    • ManicDdaily Says:

      Thanks so much, Bjorn. Hope you are enjoying the Swedish winter! We finally have deepish snow here, enough to x-country ski, though I am working much of the day on my job work, and it is terribly cold! I just ordered special mittens as when I do get out my hands are having a hard time. Thanks for your kind words and the inspiration of your own work. k.

      On Fri, Feb 6, 2015 at 8:02 AM, ManicDDaily wrote:

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  3. Steve King Says:

    It always surprises, when that first glimmer, flicker, comes to life. This connects the dots in ways that make sense to me, with great playfulness, wit and intelligence. Much enjoyed it for my early morning tonic! Have a great weekend, Karin!

  4. coalblack Says:

    The picture is ideal for this poem! (Is it drafty in here lately?) 😉

    • ManicDdaily Says:

      Thanks. So drafty–for one thing it is about 2 degrees outside in a very old creaky house–but also I’ve just taken to writing and posting fairly quickly or I won’t do anything at all–that’s why I don’t quite stand behind something I guess. Take care, k.

  5. hedgewitch Says:

    This does have a spontaneous feel to it, k, but not a rough one. The first stanza is pure delight to read, and the longer second piece takes us deeper into the process and the feel of place and time that effect it. There is also a lightness to the flow which makes it as easy to read as chocolate is to eat. Enjoyed it very much, especially all the glimmering and flickering.


  6. Wonderful… “glimmering, flickering, viewed
    at a glance
    as it dances past
    the corner of
    my eye,
    and though my pen”… pure magic

  7. gillena Says:

    luv the rthymn and dance of words

    much love…

  8. wolfsrosebud Says:

    this reminded me of a butterfly dance


  9. I LOVE this!! There’s something about the way you pose these statements as questions…it relays that ungraspable feeling that sometimes capturing a poem presents. Beautiful work, K!


  10. I enjoyed this so much because it is EXACTLY what the process is like, the glimmer, the glance, the glance of a dance…….if the dance were a poem. I LOVED this!!!!!!


  11. You left me gasping for air, with excitement at having read such a beautiful poem. Loved the way you wove so many different words into a coherent and wonderful piece. Thanks.

    Greetings from London.

  12. brian miller Says:

    its a cool thought to press that moment like a leaf between the pages of the book…and perhaps that is a bit what we try to do…though never so perfect…


  13. Poetry seems to come first from an illusive glimmer. For me it is words whispering so faintly my pen can barely hear. Beautiful ending.

  14. Kerry O'Connor Says:

    Bubbles are very reminiscent of childhood for me, sad that so many memorable occasions are lost to time as easily as those pretty things go on a summer day.

  15. Brendan Says:

    The image is both piercing and serene, and the imago of the poet beginning to write the poem is that, to me, of a someone fixing — nailing fast — a fleeting moment and holding it forth here. One moment, eternity: Its why poems are so much like dreams.

  16. Susan Says:

    Love! This glimmers and flickers and teases and promises more and more and more as your pen continues to reach. Thank you.

  17. margaret Says:

    this is my favorite poem you have written. I’m going to Pinterest it. ! Just lovely.

    • ManicDdaily Says:

      Thank you so much, Margaret–I was thinking of editing it a little–changing “glimmer” to “glow,” but that was just a passing thought, and haven’t done anything about it! Thanks much. k.


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