So, it seems


So, it seems

In even the most peaceful death,
there is a grimace,
as if the body gives life’s hand
a last tight squeeze, or is
itself squeezed,
the interlace of face releasing
into surprise,
an ah as the jaw slackens,
as if to say, ‘so, that was it, then.’
So, at least, it seems,
holding the hand,



A poem of sorts.  I am linking this to Susie Clevinger’s prompt on With Real Toads about lace.   I have uploaded the photo from my iPhone and fear it may be cut off by some browsers; just click on it, if you wish to see the whole thing.

I have edited this post twice within three minutes of posting!   I’m not sure if I’ve made better–but seems to be my way lately–indecision in editing–

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11 Comments on “So, it seems”

  1. janehewey Says:

    the consonant “s” sound is prevalent and seeping through this apt piece. I enjoy the blunt length and the presence of hand and jaw together here.

  2. Steve King Says:

    This is a compact gem, but still finds a way to shower us with memorable line after memorable line, most notably for me ‘face releasing to surprise’ and ‘so that was it then’ A superior imagination at work here.
    Steve K.

  3. Oh my, you have given words to what I couldn’t express at my mother’s passing in 2007. An amazing write!! I am so sorry for your loss, but celebrate with you his long and wonderful life. Thank you so much for writing to the prompt. (I love the photo!)

  4. Oh I love this–beautiful!

  5. margaret Says:

    We all will cross, will all interlace with life on both sides for a brief moment. This is soft and loving.

  6. Helen Says:

    This is a gift, thank you.

  7. grapeling Says:

    I attended my aunt’s funeral on Saturday. She was 91. All 8 of her surviving natural-born children attended, and numerous grandchildren, nieces, nephews, etc. You’ve caught that mood perfectly – so that was it, then… ~

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