Fall Read (Flash 55)



Fall Read

I red fall in the air;
I red fall on the road;
then red fall in the falling light
that evening early turned to night.

The grey before the indigo,
which last June red so very slow
blue by as fast as summer passed,
leaving leaving;
in dark of air and road
I hurried home.

I post the above kind of drafty poem for Galen the Great, otherwise known as the G-Man –Tell him I whittled it down to exactly 55 words!

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21 Comments on “Fall Read (Flash 55)”

  1. hedgewitch Says:

    Love the fall color, the sense of things rushing, even the speaker, coloring in the words and feelings with a quick but vivid crayon. And I also love the pics. It always seems to be a little drafty over here though. ;_)

    • ManicDdaily Says:

      Thanks.It is quite warm still despite the changing leaves. (But that was today — it can be very drafty!) I have another pic of leaves I liked a lot but it is hard some times to get from phone to post. I’m going to try to post some in the next days as this is such a beautiful time of year. k.

      PS – I’m not quite sure what I meant by the red – a joke on read – maybe better to write read, as I don’t really mean speaker coloring – sort of like I heart you – but maybe it doesn’t work. I’ll have to let it sit a while I guess.

      • hedgewitch Says:

        I like the spelling and think it works just the way you intend. Too often ‘read’ is confusing as to tense and pronunciation, since the spelling is the same. Here you make it clear, plus add some tongue-in-cheekery and color. We are expecting 100 degrees plus today and tomorrow, so it’s very refreshing to read about fall.

      • ManicDdaily Says:

        Ah– very good points. Thanks.

        Sorry it’s so hot. It is a little warm here — meaning 72! Of course that translates into something very cold in couple of months.

        On Fri, Aug 30, 2013 at 10:40 AM, ManicDDaily

  2. brian miller Says:

    nice like the cascade of the red fall through that first stanza, cool rhythm through there…and def love the fall colors…and cooler air…

  3. Alice Audrey Says:

    You’re already feeling the kiss of Winter? All the leaves that have turned here did it because of the smoke.

  4. margaret Says:

    I like the whimsical and playful use of words here – and I’m ready for fall – my favorite time of year!

  5. Great whittle, Karin. And I love the play on “red.”

  6. G-Man Says:

    I feel like I’m the Luckiest Host in the world each week, to have the honor of reading such Artistic Perfection presented to my humble writing prompt. What a beautiful little Gem Karin.
    Loved your Autumnal 55
    Thank You so very much for your wonderful support
    Have a Kick Ass Week-End

  7. Here’s to an early autumn. May your beautiful poem bring it sooner! 🙂 I’m back from Shropshire but still on blog-vacation.

    Greetings from London.

  8. Mary Says:

    I enjoyed the progression of the poem, but my favorite stanza was the first one, as I was picturing the red-falling of fall that will be here all too soon. (Visiting from G-Man!)

  9. Such an excellent evocation of the change of seasons through your colourful wordplay. I loved it.

  10. othermary Says:

    Oh such clever word-play! Love it!

  11. cloudfactor5 Says:

    So colorful and clever, time to hurry home before the snow flies!

    • ManicDdaily Says:

      Ha. Yes! Or worse.

      Actually last night I was thinking/writing this poem on my phone as I was walking home and suddenly there was a huge downpour! Luckily I was able to keep my phone dry! k.

  12. janehewey Says:

    there is a decisiveness about red that is not found so vividly, i think, in any other color. you’ve def. captured that solid assurance in this poem. I especially enjoy how you pick up the cadence in the second stanza.

    • ManicDdaily Says:

      Thanks so much, Jane. You are right about decisiveness of red — which is why I almost never wear it! Decisiveness not my strongest quality. Thanks much. k.

  13. I adore that you used red instead of read! Great !

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