“Mismatched”

(Doesn’t completely suit the poem, but you get the idea. And it’s cold!!!!!)

Mismatched

She skidded
along the surface of time.
He dug his heels in.
Either way time flowed, bunching around
his ankles, splashing about
her curves.

Feet flexed, he leaned
into his wake, barely ahead
of inundation, while she, without
suavity of surf or ski, lurched
through her glide. They tried

to hold hands,
but it was difficult.
Even side by side,
a stretch, and when he dug in, and
she swerved, great
elasticity was needed.

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Posting the above, a re-write of an older poem for dVerse Poets Open Link Night, and also for Magpie Tales (where Tess Kincaid posts a pictorial prompt.) I don’t think my poem completely fits Tess’s picture, but it did give me the idea of returning to this poem. My awkward rendition below.

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45 Comments on ““Mismatched””

  1. brian miller Says:

    smiles….all relationships could use a bit of flexibility…elasticity…and its not pretty at times…but keep ahold of that hand and i think you stand a better chance….

  2. claudia Says:

    oh i get this…needs a lot of elasticity…on both sides… and i hope they make it …somehow…i know it’s possible…ha

  3. tashtoo Says:

    Thought the word play and rhythm heated the piece up nicely…never let go! Loved the read a loud

  4. G-Man Says:

    NOTHING you do is awkward My Friend.
    Loved this Karin!!

  5. cloudfactor5 Says:

    elasticity is very hand-y, cute elephant !!!


  6. Ohhhh, just look at the elephant and the dog ~ they’re fab ~ do they have names, k?

    btw, great poem 🙂

  7. wolfsrosebud Says:

    more than one meaning here… I envision my grand daughter and her dog trying to sled down my back hill… smiles


  8. I got a vivid image of two people trying to downhill ski hand in hand–now *that* would be an olympic event! Someone is always lurching into my glide when I am leaning into their wake, it seems to me. This is very you, karin, and quite a satisfying read.

  9. Ruth Says:

    hehe i do rather get the point 😉 – k, i love how you manage always to write your poems so tight, no extraneous words


  10. This is sweet with vulnerability infused throughout. Very nice 🙂

  11. jodyo70 Says:

    WHAT a picture, Karin. “….great elasticity was needed.” Indeed. I’ve been married almost 40 years; we’ve about worn out several packages of rubberbands, if the metaphor holds….

  12. Jamie Dedes Says:

    Indeed! Elasticity a must … a fun poem and delightful artwork. I like.


  13. hands rendition pretty nice i think 😉

    esp liked,

    “time flowed, bunching around
    his ankles, splashing about
    her curves”

    something about the conjoining, mismatched or otherwise, seemed very much to fit 😉

  14. Kelvin S.M. Says:

    …sometimes, relationships really ended this way… really nice touches here Karin… smiles…


  15. nicely penned Karin. love the second stanza and it’s freezing here as well. Thanks

  16. Berowne Says:

    Life, burdensome, demanding, yet worth all the effort.

  17. David King Says:

    Stupendous. Great fun — but am I reading too much into it when I see more than fun?

  18. Dick Jones Says:

    Very nicely put together. And appropriate to the prompt, which is simply meant to stimulate a response, whatever that might produce poetically.


  19. “and when he dug in, and
    she swerved, great
    elasticity was needed.”
    I love the vivid images throughout. A clever piece 🙂

  20. ladynyo Says:

    Girl, you got that right! The need of elastic! And some bondo at times!!!

    Good poem….

    Lady Nyo

  21. janehewey Says:

    love this. your “suavity of surf or ski”
    this rings home on so many levels. I can picture and feel this quite vividly. seems like I’m always feeling for the elasticity.

  22. Pat Hatt Says:

    A little stretching keeps on nimble at least haha and having a hand to hold doesn’t hurt.


  23. And why is it that we seem to do the opposite of what our partner is doing when what we need is that flexibility and elasticity? This poem said it well.

  24. Myrna Says:

    Love this. Opposites attract and that elasticity, flexibility is what makes a relationship survive. Really good write here.

  25. apshilling Says:

    You have really nailed this one: i can relate, which makes it even more appealing but the push and pull is really palpable which is crucial and drives the energy of the piece to the next level . . . the poetically real! 😀


  26. You’ve reminded me that the stretch-push-pull-contract process is necessary for the well-being of most creatures. Consider the sapling, tied to stakes, never wavering in the wind. Remove the support and it bends to the ground, unable to manage its own weight. We are trees, aren’t we?

  27. Alex Dissing Says:

    You created a pleasant scene here that I very much enjoyed reading/watching.

  28. margaretbednar Says:

    Elasticity. Thank God for that!

  29. Pamela Says:

    Elasticity is needed, Karin, but what happens when two are like oil and water. I think there is no hope at all there. Well said.

    Pamela

  30. Luke Prater Says:

    S2 is esp strong.. love this passage –

    without
    suavity of surf or ski, lurched
    through her glide


  31. “…it was difficult.
    Even side by side,
    a stretch, and when he dug in, and
    she swerved…”

    How perfectly you have illustrated this with your words. Well penned!

  32. Tess Kincaid Says:

    Fun to lurch and glide through this charming piece…had to read it out loud…always a pleasure seeing you at Magpie Tales, K…

  33. Helen Dehner Says:

    Grand free fall of a poem … love the sketches!

  34. zongrik Says:

    quite a stretch, your poetry is most elastic


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