“Untucked”

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Untucked

When he’s away (increasingly,
these days), she
sleeps at the foot
of the bed.  It’s for the light, she
tells him, or rather
the turning off  of the light,
the lone lamp that sits on a
dwarfed file cabinet at the bed’s
bottom, not the best configuration, but rooms
are not always perfect for the
furniture people bring to them.

It was hard at first
to find a spot down there; hard to tug the top
sheet from its tuck, and even once uprooted,
to squeeze into its tight pocket, her limbs
a swaddled ricochet of angled waist, hips,
knees, aimed to keep her feet from
the opposite dangle.

I miss you too, he replies,
but he, someone who sleeps when tired, eats
when hungry, does not quite understand her fidget
around burning vacancy, the twist and turn of one
so defended she
can only meet need through
a maze, or over
a parapet.

It’s for the light, she tells him, the turning off
of the light, trying to describe the purgatory of
the doggedly dwindling, but
the truth, of course, is
more complex.

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Here’s an older poem posted for dVerse Poets Pub Open Link Night, hosted by the wonderful Hedgewitch a/k/a Joy Ann Jones.  I am also linking this post to Imperfect Prose, hosted by Emily Wierenga.
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29 Comments on ““Untucked””

  1. brian miller's avatar brian miller Says:

    i appreciate this for no other reason than for the years i used to travel…though my wifes thing was to keep a knife under the pillow…until she forgot and i almost cut my hand off one night…there is a nikki giovanni poem too about sleeping at the foot of the bed to smell their feet…

  2. janehewey's avatar janehewey Says:

    “a swaddled ricochet, her fidget, so defended” so very viscerally good and chewy. i feel for this woman and may, in fact, be her in ways i don’t care to magnify. ~~jane

  3. claudia's avatar claudia Says:

    wow…there’s much complexity in this…streams that run under the surface.. great job on painting the images k.

  4. kaykuala's avatar kaykuala Says:

    When alone we tend to feel insecure for no reason. There are however a number of other reasons here which may not be thought of when there’s someone else also! This is something real. Great thoughts K!

    Hank

  5. aprille's avatar aprille Says:

    Emotional undercurrents so strong that it could knock one out of bed altogether 🙂
    Full of the most delicious phrases.


  6. I would never have thought of sleeping at the bottom of the bed as being more secure. Maybe sleeping in their ‘spot’ might do for me. There are so many layers to this. Yikes on Brian’s wife sleeping with a knife. That’s scary! LOL
    This is fabulous in it’s imagery. We have a tiny nightlight always plugged into the wall socket in the hall and, my bedroom door is always open so, while the room is dark, there is always a light on.
    A lovely read to start my morning, thank you!


  7. One thing about your writing is that you focused on a single frame and give it details and emotional play ~ And I always sleep with a small light on ~ Enjoyed your share ~

  8. Steve King's avatar Steve King Says:

    ” does not quite understand her fidget
    around burning vacancy”…this poem is filled with great lines and insights. You take an instance and explore it so thoroughly and intimately. Very nice work.

  9. ladynyo's avatar ladynyo Says:

    This is true to life. I think some of us do these contortions because we are uneasy being alone at times…especially at night. I have also had many years of insomnia, and do something very much like this: sleep at the bottom of the bed. Especially during thunderstorms when the strikes of lightening are right outside the window at the top of the bed!

    A lovely and complex poem, K. With that very strong touch of universality on the human condition.

    Lady Nyo…

  10. amivglobus's avatar amivglobus Says:

    Just lovely. There are few places lonelier than an empty bed.

  11. kreemer's avatar kolembo Says:

    Firstly, what a great, simple blog. Absolutely.
    And then the poem – so many…bits to it…I wasn’t insomnia, I was someones dead cat!
    Lovely.

  12. David King's avatar David King Says:

    It always is more complex, of course. Only parents – and those who think themselves parents, like teachers, magistrates etc – demand “The simple, plain, unvarnished truth.”


  13. To me, this is a really important metaphorical poem, Karin. It raises questions about relationship and the issue of complexity makes me want to know more. So good.

  14. ManicDdaily's avatar ManicDdaily Says:

    Thanks so much, Victoria. Hope you are well. k.

  15. Chazinator's avatar Chazinator Says:

    I deeply enjoyed this poem karin. I found so much that is feminine, and thereby mysterious to me. It has that gentleness of soul that I call simplicity of heart, which dwarfs all pretensions to universal knowledge of power in its amazing ability to see what is real simply thru love and care. Wonderfully written.

  16. markwindham's avatar markwindham Says:

    very good. i have never had to travel much, but we have been discussing it more lately… Love the last stanza

  17. hobgoblin2011's avatar hobgoblin2011 Says:

    Neat write. The tone is perfect here and the scene is painted very nicely. Sleeping is very interesting to me, as I’ve experienced so many different situations with it. I used to travel, and many days I’d wake not knowing where I’m at, I’ve had the urge to do nothing but sleep as well as week long episodes of insomnia. But probably the oddest thing I’ve experienced in regards to sleeping has to do with the foot of the bed. Recently actually, I’ve experienced on more than one occasion, where I’ll go to be as per usual, only to somehow find myself waking up in completely the other direction, at the foot. It’s a mystery, perhaps some variation of sleepwalking, which if the case, would actually be a first, but in any case, sorry for the long note, but the sleeping at the foot of the bed notion rang true for me and thought I’d share this bit of personal oddity lol. Great read. Thanks


  18. Your poem reminds me of how very blessed I am to be able to sleep anytime, anywhere. Sometimes I think I’m borderline narcoleptic. My poor husband, on the other hand: he forbids me to take the children away for more than two night at a time because he can’t sleep when we’re gone. He won’t go to bed, at all.

  19. Chris Galvin's avatar chris Says:

    Great write, Karin. The characters are so well developed. Funny how some people could sleep through an eathquake while others, usually the partners of sound sleepers, awaken at the slightest noise, and have trouble sleeping when the setting changes or the partner is away.

  20. beckykilsby's avatar beckykilsby Says:

    brilliant approach to the complexity of relationship.. really enjoed your exploration of this.


  21. “burning vacancy” and “it’s for the light…” i get this. it’s a love thing. that makes you so restless, with and without, because it’s so mysterious and powerful and keeps you wanting more.


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