The Kind of Epiphany I’m Looking For – Chocolate Happens and More.
Here’s a poem I’ve been playing with for the last few days. (Anything but work on old Nanowrimo manuscripts!)
Though it’s still rough, I’m posting it today for the wonderful dVerse Poets Pub Open Link night.
Epiphany
I would really like to have an epiphany
that doesn’t involve the realization
that death happens.
Why can’t my great enlightenment
alert me to the fact that
chocolate happens?
That peppermint explodes in the mouth?
That eggs are unblinking
(until the yolks crack)?
And that the love that always forgives, that is,
the love you give to me,
is not like the sun at noon–everywhere–
but rather a pale pre-rosy dawn that
barely nudges the landscape, lifts but an
edge of shadow, illuminating
the flickering eyelids of
only one–a poor light sleeper, who,
at the waning
of stark night, feels the glow of your hearth
at her side, and inside,
the sudden certainty that even
that star whose contours
cannot be traced
in the quotidian sky
pulses on.
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ManicDDaily 
November 8, 2011 at 12:19 pm
Rough? Are you kidding? It’s gorgeous!
November 8, 2011 at 3:26 pm
this is really good…i like it…i like what it asks for and i think you hit it fresh…eggs unblinking may be my fav part…haha…love lines like that…and please pass the chocolate…
November 8, 2011 at 3:39 pm
Have to agree with MamaZ…thought this a wonderful weave, strong presentation and fantastic rhythm. A joy to read…though now I want chocolate…
November 8, 2011 at 5:22 pm
Rhythm was great, truly had your epiphany for this verse, great job!
November 8, 2011 at 6:02 pm
I want chocolate, right now 🙂 like Brian I love the line eggs unblinking , love that!
November 8, 2011 at 6:09 pm
a ‘rough draft’ turns out to be quite good….if you do hone it up, you should re-post it …can’t wait to see the final product.
Good poem.
November 8, 2011 at 6:16 pm
Yep, definitely a wonderful weave, tash and MZ said it best. And yes, it would be nice if epiphanies of chocolate happened all the time, nothing could be sweeter, well with the exception of caramel, or perhaps caramel inside chocolate- mmm. now I need to get a caramello:)
November 8, 2011 at 7:09 pm
“Why can’t my great enlightenment
alert me to the fact that
chocolate happens?”
Laughed aloud at that. Wouldn’t that be the greatest of enlightenments? A good mix of light and serious here; smiles stir despite some of the engagements we face. And I must agree on the rhythm front, with those come before me.
Also: Quotidian…now there’s a new word to add to my vocabulary.
November 8, 2011 at 8:56 pm
Thanks so much, Chris, to you and everyone who’s commented.
November 8, 2011 at 7:47 pm
Seems to be done to me. Love it. Oh how I wish chocolate would happen to me soon!
November 8, 2011 at 8:59 pm
Some very nice revelations in there. Chocolate sounds awesome right now. Well, chocolate sounds awesome almost always.
November 8, 2011 at 9:04 pm
My kind of subtle, borderline sarcastic, sneakily touching piece.
November 8, 2011 at 9:36 pm
not rough at all but beautifully written…though i like the chocolates illumination, your last lines are fresh and subtle …lovely share ~
the love you give to me,
is not like the sun at noon–everywhere–
but rather a pale pre-rosy dawn that
barely nudges the landscape
November 8, 2011 at 9:38 pm
Thanks so much. I think the drawing accentuates the chocolate aspect! K.
November 8, 2011 at 10:44 pm
Gorgeous, lyrical cascading poetic “sentences” completing themselves in this poem– wonderful technically and emotively! xj http://parolavivace.blogspot.com — xj
November 8, 2011 at 10:49 pm
Thanks, Jenne.
November 8, 2011 at 11:36 pm
Mmm, chocolate and then those insistently unblinking eggs. It made me want something mousse-y right away.
The gentler openings of dawn and the eyelid images pair up nicely together, as do the throbbing pulse of body and star.
Maybe it is like two poems on epiphany, the 1st ending with the sharp crack of the yolks?
November 9, 2011 at 12:52 am
Wonderful imagery on love..that is soothing, warm and fulfilling… I liked it so much..
Thanks for sharing…
Shashi
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/11/whispers-tears-in-rain.html
November 9, 2011 at 9:54 am
Ah yes, I dream of pleasant epiphanies as well. But death is always ‘there,’ isn’t it? Your poem ends optimistically……The star pulses on! Beautiful write.
November 9, 2011 at 11:45 am
Beautifully written (I can’t believe it’s just a draft…) I laughed out loud at “chocolate happens,” but the second half felt more serious.
November 9, 2011 at 2:47 pm
honestly…think that’s my fav from yours that i read so far..and yes..peppermint does explode in the mouth…love that
November 9, 2011 at 5:26 pm
Agree with Claudia-one of my favorite poems of yours instantly–this is so true. I love the idea that life and its rewarding sensations is more clarifying than the knowledge of death, and that love is the hearth glowing beside us, far more than a blazing sun everyone can see. Really a subtle yet profound piece. Loved it, mdd.
November 9, 2011 at 11:43 pm
Thanks!
November 9, 2011 at 9:24 pm
This feels very finished and refined. Love is the epiphany.
“that star whose contours
cannot be traced
in the quotidian sky
pulses on.”
These lines are a great characterization of the important eternal things.
November 9, 2011 at 11:43 pm
Thanks for your very thoughtful comment.
November 10, 2011 at 11:33 am
love those last four lines– what a beautiful certainty!