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Silver Slipper

Today, tried a pantoum.  The great thing about a pantoum (a form of repeating lines) is that you don’t need to come up with so many new lines.  ( For instructions on the form, check here.)

Remember, this is a draft a day!  A Draft!  (And the point is for you to try too.)

(Please note that in my poetry, pauses come only with punctuation–commas, or periods–and not at line breaks.)

Last Anniversary Party

She walked that night on the side
edges of silver slippers.
Her smile stretched movie-star wide
above sored feet that moved like flippers.

The edges of silver slippers,
gathering, elasticized
around sored feet that moved like flippers
as their slow, held, waltz defined

our gathering; elasticized
the sweet stretched around the bitter
that their slow, held, waltz defined.
We were her husband, her too, who fitted

that sweet, stretched around the bitter,
to make it last, while we each tried
to be her husband, her too, as they fitted
loss with all that sparkled fine

to make it last, while we  each tried
a smile stretched movie-star wide,
at loss, at all that sparkled fine.
She walked that night still on this side.

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